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25 October 2007 @ 04:33 pm
Fic: In the Name of the Father  

Hello, hello, I'm new here and not sure how this Live Journal thingy works. Bare with me.

I have a Hot Fuzz fic which you can read at http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3846657/1/In_the_Name_of_the_Father

Hope the link works. Write a comment or two--be much appreciated.


Current Mood: intimidatedintimidated
mikes_grrl on October 25th, 2007 10:29 pm (UTC)
It took me a little bit to get drawn into this, but when I did, I enjoyed it a lot. I really like how you captured Danny's confused thought processes ("yes? no? Dad???? Skinnner!") and I particularly enjoy pieces set as background to what we see in the movie and this was a nicely thought out one. Particularly at the end where Danny is talking to himself about his brilliant idea! FUnny and well done.

THe only part that threw me was the "never been horrified?" line because it was not coming from Danny, but from you, the author, and it broke the rhythm of what you had going. Maybe you could recast it as a thought of Danny's? Just a suggestion based on my reading.

Overall a great little piece! Thanks for sharing!
zombie survivalist: giggle copsbeccavox on October 26th, 2007 01:17 am (UTC)
nice stuff...I really like Danny telling Lurch he's under arrest for being a 'git'...but then again, the word 'git' always makes me laugh. And a nice was to get Lurch to the Castle, as well...I did wonder why he made it there.

The only like I bristled at was "Take that, smart-ass"...only because if that was Danny referring to Angel, it didn't work for me (only because Danny has pretty much been worshipping Angel up to this point...) But that's just my two-cents.

A nice little story...thanks for posting.
La Femme Crayola: Hot Fuzz want monkey want monkeyannlarimer on October 26th, 2007 10:00 pm (UTC)
Now, see, "Take that, smart-ass" cracked me up like a cracking thing. :D
zombie survivalistbeccavox on October 26th, 2007 10:48 pm (UTC)
okay, I'll admit it probably made me bristle because I think of Danny not questioning whatever Angel says/does/thinks. And I'd had a little cider.

Okay, a moderate amount of cider.

La Femme Crayola: Hot Fuzz want monkey want monkeyannlarimer on October 29th, 2007 01:17 pm (UTC)

Either American and British cider are very, very different, or there's something terribly wrong with your apples.
zombie survivalist: andesbeccavox on October 31st, 2007 08:13 pm (UTC)
Ha! I'd been drinking Strongbow; got hooked on it when I lived in the UK. The only problem is that now that I'm back in the US, I have to hunt it down like an endangered species and buy it in bulk.
La Femme Crayola: Batgirl CU by seraphittaannlarimer on October 31st, 2007 08:16 pm (UTC)
It has booze in it?
zombie survivalistbeccavox on October 31st, 2007 08:55 pm (UTC)
oh, heck yeah...about 5.0% alc/vl. And it tastes far better than beer, IMO.

If you can find it on tap, that's the best...but unfortunately, the US hasn't quite discovered it yet. I have to drive two hours to get it on tap at a "Scottish" pub.
Mary-Mooviedma on October 26th, 2007 01:37 am (UTC)
That was a great missing scene story. I like how you made Danny guileless without being dumb-- it's hard to do, but you did it very well. I also like how you showed the erosion of Danny's belief in his father, and everything he thought he knew about Sandford, esp this paragraph:

Danny feels something squirm in his belly. Maybe because his belly knows something his brain doesn’t want to. He’s being paranoid, jumping to conclusions—the very idea is so ridiculous. He’s just worried because he doesn’t know where Skinner is, he doesn’t know where Nick is, he doesn’t know why the Sandford police aren’t here, and he doesn’t know what’s come over Dad.

Most excellent! :D
La Femme Crayola: Hot Fuzz want monkey want monkeyannlarimer on October 26th, 2007 08:31 pm (UTC)

Fantastic. You used brains to make it, and it shows.
lacking in glittertawg on October 27th, 2007 12:48 am (UTC)
Nick thinks he’s Batman or something. Okay, he’s a little bit like Batman…
"...Now wake up so I can properly intimidate you.”
These were delightfully hilarious lines.

And I have to admit, this was a pretty damn awesome story - I have never read a fic that bridged Danny in the hotel room to Danny stabbing Angel before (and the fact that there was NO explanation of how he went from A to B in the movie bugged me). It was very much in character with Danny, and especially with Frank.
Big Twinkiebig_twinkie on October 27th, 2007 03:02 pm (UTC)
Ohhh, reviews!!!
What a response! Thank you for writing back everyone, I'll take your critiques to heart for future stories.